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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The supplied maps illustrate an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that a comparison of
two
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 maps reveals a change from completely uninhabited to a mainly
touristic
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 landscape. During the period,
island
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 experienced a number of
dramaric
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dramatic
 changes. The most noticeable is that a pier was constructed,
along with
 some boats being used.
Furthermore
, a new residential estate with accommodations sprang out around the palmas. It can be clearly observed that
vehicle
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 track was established in order to get from
pier
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the pier
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 to the reception and restaurant.
In addition
, visitors easily can access
to
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their residents and
beach
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the beach
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 thanks to
footpath
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the footpath
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. The beach is located
in
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 the west side of
island
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the island
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, where swimming activities are available in comparison with the other side, which had no changes at all.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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