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With the rise of e-books comes the decline in paper book. Some people see this a good step forward while others not. What are advantages and disadvantages on this trend?

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Nowadays, reading
books
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 on electronic devices
such
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 as
tablet
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 and smartphones has been a popular issue for individuals. In
this
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essay
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 I will make an effort to explain the pros and cons of the given topic. On the positive side, first and foremost
e-
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books
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 can be carried easily. People Actually can carry dozens of
books
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 with them wherever they go.
Secondly
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electronics
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books
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 can be accessed in
fraction
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a fraction
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 of a second through
use
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 of advanced modern technology.
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, they are a lot less expensive and
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 eco-friendly, because they do not require any paper.
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, information
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e-
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books
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 can
be immediately update
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while
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 in traditional
books
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 it may take even years.
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, my cousin goes to electronic school and she
carry
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 only a tablet with her,
instead
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 of a heavy bag full of
books
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 and
this
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 helps her to have a healthier body. On the downside, recent research has shown that
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spending too much time reading electronic
books
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 on bright screens, eyesight and body posture definitely get affected.
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, people perhaps face several problems,
such
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 as
deformation
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the deformation
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 of
neck
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the neck
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. So printed paper
books
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 are safe. To illustrate an example, my friend is interested in reading
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a book
the book
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book
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books
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 and
she
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apply
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every day
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study
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 only
e-
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books
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,
hence
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 after six years,
unfortunately
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 she had to wear glasses In conclusion, from my perspective, the benefits of
e-
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books
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 certainly outweigh
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the drawback
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drawback
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drawbacks
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.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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