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The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think that this will lead to English becoming the only langusge to be spoken globally. What are the advantages and disadvantages to having one language in the world?

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Tourism growth has helped
English
 to become the most famous
language
 worldwide. Individuals
suggests
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 that
English
 will become the only spoken
language
 internationally. In
this
 essay, I would be discussing the advantages and disadvantages of speaking
one
language
 worldwide. The
advantages
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 of having
one
language
 globally is that it
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helps to
promotes
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 international trade.
This
 is because
people
 will be able to import and export goods and services from
one
 country to another without having any difficulties in speaking
English
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language
.
For example
, individuals now trade different commodities like television sets, clothes, machinery, food and raw materials.
As a result
, it gives the avenue to strengthen the relations between countries. There is no doubt that speaking
one
language
 globally has
help
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 to expand the trade for products and services.
However
, the negative effects of speaking only
English
 in the world
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 now been a threat for some
people
.
Firstly
, it will cause
language
 extinction among
people
 in the country.
In addition
, it is harmful because
people
tends
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 to lose their cultures and knowledge with each lost
language
 worldwide. Individuals have difficulty
in
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understanding their environment, different subjects around them and human cognition. It can
also
leads
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 to the loosing of cultural identities.
As a result
, the loss of cultural practices can result
to
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 reduced social cohesion because an individual’s culture is closely connected to their sense of identity. So it is important to preserve endangered languages. In conclusion,
although
 the growth of tourism has helped
English
 to become the most important
language
 in the world. I would suggest that
people
 should be given equal opportunities to speak the
language
 of their choice in order
avoid
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 discrimination
amongst
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and prevent conflict amongst
people
 of the country.
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