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many people believe that the educational standards have declined in recent times.discuss the causes and some possible solutions

#people #standards #times
There is no doubt
this
 day. Many people think that the education stander had declined in
this
 time
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. The question is. why
students
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 stop learning in
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 regular way
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 in
this
 essay, I am going to describe the reasons and the possible solutions. In terms of causes, many corporates depend on experience and how the worker can solve
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problems .The main reason given to support
this
 claim is that in the
last
period
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 Companies noticed that they had to spend more money on
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training programs because most of the new employees do not know how to work
,
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 or to use the system and the machines. To illustrate, the CS students, most of them do not any idea about coding. In
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other words, the books in the universities learn the students about
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 things and most of the time do not have a connection between the major and the subject.
However
, we can reduce
this
 phenomenon by
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 our way to learn, and
increase
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 the number of
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active lessons.
Moreover
, families can help
with
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encourage their children to learn and to receive the highest degree in many educational
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 to develop their personality and their background. In conclusion, we can see that to improve the standard of education we have to work with families and
school
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 because they get their role models from here. For interest, the father is
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doctor and the mother is
teacher
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 will make them want to be the same.
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