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Some argue that success in life is determind by where a person is born and how he or she grow up. Others believe that these factors have no effect on personal success. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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Some claim that where a person is born and the surrounding
environment
 is the primary reason for successful
life
while
 others say that these elements are not related to personal
success
. In my opinion. I agree with the latter's statement because being successful is determined by how
people
 act or make an effort." On the one hand, the
environment
 in, which a person grew up greatly affects how he/she can succeed in the future Admittedly, how to grow up and where they were born can be the primary reasons for successful fast and quickly...
For example
, rich families can afford to pay tuition for a private school for their own children before entering university, which is advantageous for them as they can take high-quality lessons not only in school . Those advantages expand the differences to
success
 fast.
On the other hand
, the
environment
 in child food sult a great factor in
success
 because whether
people
 can do it or not is related to how to act and make an effort to achieve their own goals. No matter hard
life
 in childhood is, the maximum effort can change
people
's
life
 positively
furthermore
, disadvantages in child food апоре то to achieve those goals. would be the strongest points to be after that because of those surprising experiences. can give many
people
. It takes a lot of time to succeed, it is worth acting In conclusion, of though the
environment
 where
people
 grow up might be a factor to define whether they can succeed or not, how to act after those difficulties must be experiencing more important for spending Successful
life
.
Therefore
, I believe that the
environment
 doesn't matter to
success
.
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