Some people think that government should spend money on railways. Others believe that there should be more investment into new roads. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Any investment in infrastructure will help the
country
and
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its citizen
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citizen
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citizens
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, that include either railways or new
roads
.
While
some
people
believe that
government
must focus on railways ,there are
other
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others
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think
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who think
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that
government
investment should be on new
roads
. In
this
essay
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i
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I
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will discuss both views and tell you why
i
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I
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think that investment
into
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in
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new
roads
are
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is
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better for citizens . It is no doubt true how important railways are for the
country
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country's
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economy and
also
transfer , it is one of the critical transport
form
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forms
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because we can take many
people
from
point
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one point
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to another and they should not pay much money .
for
instance
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in
Suadi
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one train could take
maximum
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a maximum
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300
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of 300
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person
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people
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in one trip and prevent traffic
also
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and also
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decrease carbon emissions . every
country
or
government
must spend money on
devploment
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development
deployment
into new
roads
not only
this
but
also
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spending
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on
planing
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planning
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and the way they want their
road
look
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like
also
if they would like
these
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this road
these roads
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road
to contain stores and gas stations or any form of service
people
will need . It is understandable that
inversment
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investment
inot
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into
not
new
road
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roads
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are something necessary when you have
increasing
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increased
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in
poplations
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populations
population
,
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when a
country
would like to
attrack
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attract
attack
tourist
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tourists
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they must have plenty of new
road
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roads
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that can help
people
to move around between the cities .
Inconclusion
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any
government
should
devide
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divide
decide
the money
on
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into
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both new and old
roads
.
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