In some countries, more and more parents begin to teach their children at home rather than send them to school. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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In current times, learning from
home
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rather than going to
school
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becomes a trend around the world. Personally,
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that going to
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has more advantages than its cons. In
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, learning at
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some drawbacks, primarily, in some cases most
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parents are not well educated.
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,
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and mothers do not have
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experience
in all
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, in
school
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there is a specific qualified teacher for every subject.
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, in recent
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due to
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inflation, both partners are doing
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their job
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job
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jobs
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to leave a better
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lifestyle
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. So if they want to give education to their child at
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, one of them must have to
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his or her job and
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could not be good for
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lifestyle.
On the other hand
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, if we look towards the merits of teaching at
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pro is to save your son or girls from crime in their adult age.
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global research
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that the highest ratio of criminals
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to the age of 15 to 20 years. So learning them at
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can avoid
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victim results.
In addition
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, some countries do not have
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sufficient
educational institutes to provide quality education to
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youth.
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, some districts do not have nearby
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school
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schools
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and as
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concequence
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consequence
, there is no choice rather than
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education. In my opinion,
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belive
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that,
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is not a big deal,
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issue
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can
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by building schools and colleges. In conclusion,
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home
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learning
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some pros like avoiding being criminals but I believe that
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the disadvantages
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of learning from unqualified parents
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more significance.
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