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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two map shows information about
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as well as
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planned
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the planned
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 development of
norbiton
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Norbiton
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 city in future. At
the
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first glance, we can see that industrial
area
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areas
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 is replaced with
school
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schools
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, shops, medical
center
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 and infrastructure It is crystal clear to see that there is considerable change in
road
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the road
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.
In
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 the south side, there is another roundabout
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,
bridge
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 was built on the river which will connect farmland and housing to the
center
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 area. In the second place, in
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the south
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south east
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 of
old
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the old
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 roundabout,
medical
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a medical
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center
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 will be built
while
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 in
south west
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south-west
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 shops will be constructed.
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,
school
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the school
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 will be located
in
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on the far left
Lastly
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, all factories will be changed
as
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a
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housing,
furthermore
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, between
accommodation
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 there will be
playground
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a playground
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 in
this
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 plan.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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