IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 8.5

Radio will no longer be able to hold its presence, as television and internet media will replace it very soon. Do you agree or disagree?

#radio #presence #television #internet #media
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
With technological advancement, old items are quickly being replaced by newer ones. The life span of products has shortened as almost every day new developments are seen in one or another field which makes existing products useless. The same applies to the
radio
Use synonyms
, where easy availability of the
Internet
Use synonyms
 and television have replaced
radios
Use synonyms
 and no one wants to listen to the shows when they actually can see visual expressions of the artists on the TV set. I see myself favouring the given statement and putting forth my opinion in the following paragraphs.
To begin
Linking Words
 with, in
this
Linking Words
 fast-paced life people don't have time to listen to
radio
Use synonyms
 shows exactly at the same time every day. Nowadays, video recordings are available which facilitate individuals to record their favourite shows so they can watch them whenever they feel convenient. People can
also
Linking Words
 watch decade-old movies or shows on the
Internet
Use synonyms
 ,unlike
radios
Use synonyms
 where they can't listen to old shows
according to
Linking Words
 their comfort.
Secondly
Linking Words
, the wide availability of televisions has almost replaced
radios
Use synonyms
. As a matter of
fact
Add a comma
,fact
show examples
 is that every household has a television. There are barely any houses left with a TV set.
Therefore
Linking Words
, when televisions are available to watch movies and shows no one pays any heed to turning on
radios
Use synonyms
. Not only easy reach of the television industry, they are continuously updating their models to cope with the latest demands of society
such
Linking Words
 as introducing the
Internet
Use synonyms
 on TV sets which means people can watch whatever they want on their televisions which are already connected to the
Internet
Use synonyms
.
To sum up
Linking Words
, I would say sooner the existence of
radios
Use synonyms
 will completely vanish. I listened to the
radio
Use synonyms
 when I was a child now, I have to tell my children what
radio
Use synonyms
 is.
Submitted by simranjeetkaur.86.68 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: