The maps below illustrate how Frenton changed from 1990 to 2012.

The maps below illustrate how Frenton changed from 1990 to 2012.
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The maps demonstrate the transformation of a place called Frenton from 1990 to 2012.
Overall
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, it nearly changed to an entirely different
area
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, with a few features
remained
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unchanged. Basically, it
turnt
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turns
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into a more modern residential
area
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and was supplied by various public facilities and
entertainments
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entertainment
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. Looking at the eastern part of High Street
first,
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the cafe and park located
at
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the central
area
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were redeveloped into a hotel and golf court.
Subsequently
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, they were surrounded by the newly built residential buildings in 2012.
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, the cinema and supermarket at the bottom were changed to cater
the
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needs of residents which were former theatres and unknown shops respectively in 1990. Moving on to the western part of
High
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Street, more stories of flats and a park, which promoted new technology, were added in 2012 after deforestation.
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the hospital in the middle
area
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was enlarged, the bank was closed and transformed into an eatery.
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, the school and library remained unchanged after the new urban planning.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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