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Some people believe that the internet has made face-to-face communication less important and has led to increased social isolation. Others argue that the internet has improved our ability to stay connected with friends and family, making us less isolated. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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people
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 think
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people
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 not talk face to face much, Others think
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make
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 us more connected. I will talk about both sides and give my opinion.
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people
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 not meet much. Many
people
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 use
phone
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 and
computer
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 for talking. They don't see other
people
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 in person.
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make
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 them feel lonely.
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 ,they may feel not as connected with their friends and family as in the past. Over time, their relationships change and they become worse
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,
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help
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people
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 stay connected. They can talk to friends and family far away.
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 is good for keeping relationships strong.
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, a person who travels very far to learn or work can still talk to their family. If things were similar to in the past, they could not talk and never be able to stay in touch. In my opinion,
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 is good for communication. It
help
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 us talk to
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 far away and know what
happening
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 in their life.
People
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 should use
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 wisely and not feel lonely

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