The maps below show how a coastal town developed between 1950 and 2007.

The maps below show how a coastal town developed between 1950 and 2007.
The diagram shows the road map of a coastal region before and after the renovation in the years 1950 and 2007 respectively. In a comparison of these two time periods,one important amendment is that a livelihood has been constructed to the left side after bypassing the entrance and some close to the ocean in the form of apartments.On walking through the road, multiple retail shops can be seen on either side which was
initially
covered by grass.For the purpose of , entertainment a cinema hall is established at the beginning.
Initially
, car parking was located far from the sea and was congested ,but now it is made so close as it lies next right to the sea and upgraded to a multi-starry level.Space for industries is now used for a joyful swimming pool and a park which are connected to the parking.
furthermore
, many yachts have been introduced with a double wall to the water resource.
To conclude
, the original coastal land have a simple layout with no amenities but over the years it had gained many commercials like shops, cinemas, sophisticated vehicle garages, boating, and houses.
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