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The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants

The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants
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The diagram illustrates the total of people in terms of gender who visited four evening programs at an adult education centre in 2009,
while
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 the pie graph describes the range of ages based on the visitors.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
women
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 had the highest value almost in all courses,
on the other hand
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, the average attendance who came to
this
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 event was 50
years
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 old or above.
To begin
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, language was the most popular event among the
women
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 which was with 40 attendees,
however
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, sculpture came with the lowest value approximately 5.
In addition
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, the total of
women
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 who visited drama was 20. In the painting program, there were six-fold
women
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 more than in the sculpture,
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 the statistic of men was slightly different around 5 people and it became the greatest value compared to other courses among the men. The men's visitors in the drama had the same rate as sculpture at 10,
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, the language course nearly doubled in comparison to these two courses. Turning to the pie chart, the visitor in the range of age 50
years
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 old and above was the highest statistic at 42%,
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 to the young people under 20 who came with the minimum percentage.
Moreover
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, attendees who visited
this
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 program in the range of 20 to 29 and 30 to 39
years
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 old were at 11% and 16%, respectively.
Subsequently
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, societies in age 40 to 49
years
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 old came to second place at 26%.
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