The graph shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The line graph illustrates how many shops became closed and how many of them started their business in a country from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
, as we can see, the highest figure for openings was in 2011 and the highest number of closings was in 2013. Looking at the graph, it is easily apparent that shops experienced the sharpest decline from 2011-2012 which was about 4500.
However
, there was a steady increase in the number of new markets which reached from almost 4000 to just over 6000 in 2014.
Nevertheless
, the country had a significant decline in the number of openings with around 4000 in 2015.
Then
this
trend remained stable between 2015 and 2017 which was again around 4000.
Finally
, it fell to its low in 2018 which was 3000 opening shops around the country.
On the other hand
, the trend
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closures had more wax and wane,
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from around 6400 closures in 20111 and reached to a peak of over 7000 in 2013.
On the contrary
, markets fell to their low in 2015 which was approximately 500 closings.
Then
it grew steeply from 2015-2016 to almost 5000.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • steady
  • decline
  • increase
  • peak
  • trough
  • magnitude
  • trend
  • surpass
  • plummet
  • annual
  • consecutive
  • closure rate
  • inception rate
  • net growth
  • commercial landscape
  • retail sector
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