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The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table gives information about the
number
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 of international travellers in Africa, America, Asia and the Pacific, Europe, and
Middle
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the Middle
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 East in 4 different years. In general, the
amount
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number
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 of people
went
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who went
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 abroad
keep
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kept
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 increasing from 1990 to 2005. Europe accounted for the highest
number
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 of all the
period
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periods
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 given,
whereas
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 the Middle East has the least figure. In terms of the total
number
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, there was a significant rise from 1990 to 1995 reaching more than 100
million
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.
Subsequently
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, the growth was still happening. In 1990, Europe took about half of total travellers which is 280.2
million
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 and kept rising reaching 400.2
million
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at the end
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 of the period.
Although
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 the Middle East kept rising steadily, it was the lowest
number
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 of
change
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changes
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 from 9.8 to 15.8 in 2005. There was a drop
of
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in
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number
Correct article usage
the number
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 in 2005 that
occured
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occurred
 in America. It grew from 1990 up until 2000
then
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 dropped
about
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by about
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 5
million
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 people.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International travel
  • Million
  • Trend
  • Gradual rise
  • Significant jump
  • Technological advancements
  • Increased affluence
  • Globalization
  • Rate of increase
  • Low-cost airlines
  • Ease of travel
  • Tourism promotion
  • Regional differences
  • Cultural exchange
  • Economic impact
  • Environmental concerns
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