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Some people think that it is better to choose friends who always have some options have them, Other people believe it’s good to have who disagree. discuses both views and give your options.

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Nowadays with improved technology, people not too difficult to have made friends in different counties with different cultures. Some folk like to live in the same comfort zone friend. I would like to have friends with different cultures and visions.
Firstly
,
those
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 who
is
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are
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 like to stay the same options and don’t have any disagreement folk, There
is
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are
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 long-lasting very healthy relationships.Unable to develop unnecessary debit and fighting. They would take any task can get on time. Always time is saved. Working together is very easy because of the same option folk. No arguments and unnecessary debates. It would be a strong bond.
On the other hand
,
nation
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 with different ideologies
as a result
 buildup strong
party
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parties
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. When they want to make a decision be not in positions. Should be a long time process.
Beneficially
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 and very effective when
this
 organization get some options. Even
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 will be knowledgeable.
To conclude
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while
 people who disagree with us are able to get a good solution. What is without light and darkness
likewise
 what is the relationships without fighting
.
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,
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way we are staying 21centuray.
Sosity
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Society
 has various ideas. So because of that going to take some decisions too late. As a ,result
finally
come
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 out with
positives
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 output. ,
Eventually
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 any positions most of our friend disagrees with actually save us and correct us.
However
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 who
have
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 the
team
 same mildest are not a strong
team
 and knowledgeable
team
.
Furthermore
 all of them same mildest unavailable to chance for the talk over.
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