The diagram below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagrams represent the road maps of a grand park in two time periods 1920 and now. over the years, many amendments took place in the area

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as a hall for music festivals, a cafe and many more. There are two main entrances one is from Eldon Street and the other is from Arnold Avenue.

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, a new way is created in

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corner,which connects to the garage. After bypassing the gate, a fabulous fountain is observed at the time its built,which, is now replaced by a square-shaped rose garden with seating facilities all around. In the west, the stage for the musicians and seats are now upgraded to a sophisticated amphitheatre for concerts. Out of the three rose plantations in the corners ,only one in the northwest persists over the years.The pond for water plants is now converted into a children's play area.

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, fascinating water features and a cafe are constructed in the southern wing.

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, the new park has 2 rose gardens, a children's play area, a restaurant and a musical theatre.

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landscape
amenities
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transformation
accessible
visitor demographics
green space
heritage
floral arrangements
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infrastructure
pathways
interactive areas
natural habitat
community engagement
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