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Scientists believe that the world is in danger due to environmental changes .Some people say that personal lifestyle should be made to reduce the damage to environment, while others think that the government should do something to help. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

#scientists #world #danger #changes #people #lifestyle #damage #environment #government
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people believe
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environmental
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 the biggest danger to
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society .In my opinion
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the combined effort of both the government and the people can
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 the damage to the
environment
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 the modernization and urbanisation which is happening around the world
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environment
 .The climatic conditions
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 changed
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environment
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changes
 .The
overall
 temperature of the earth is increasing day by day .In the polar region the iceberg
are
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 melting
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environmental
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 .some should change
lifestyle
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society .
By reducing
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 the
gas
emissions
 in the vehicle can reduce the air pollution around us .Reducing the usage of crackers during the festival season..planting more
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trees helps the reduction of damage
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 the
environment
 Government should control the
gas
 emission from the industrial sector. Carbon
emissions
 from the industries .increase the methanol content in the gasoline used in the vehicle
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 leads to the reduction of
gas
emissions
. Protect the ozone layers by reducing the
gas
emissions
 of the industry
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conclusion both the government and
public
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 should combine to reduce the effects of
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gas
emissions
 from the industry
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