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Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness?

#happiness #life #factors
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It is true that feeling happing is significant in our daily
life
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.
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, it is not easy to measure how joyful we are, and there are a variety of reasons to show the importance of obtaining happiness. Happiness is an emotional feeling which is definitely tough
for
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measurement
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. It cannot be measured and quantified by any scientific tool. There is no test system or examination to measure how
people
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feeling
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feel
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on
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happy
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a happy
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 mood or bad mood. Unlike the examination in
study
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,
people
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 know
that
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what is passing mark
because
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is because
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 they set out marking guidelines and standards in the examinations.
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,
people
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 have different
sense
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 of satisfaction
on
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in
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 feeling happy.
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, children may feel very happy
on
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about
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 eating
ice-cream
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ice cream
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whereas
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 young
people
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 may feel very excited
on
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about
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wining
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winning
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 a computer game but not
ice-cream
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ice cream
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. There are several reasons which are essential for
people
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 being happy. When
people
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 to be felt happy all day, they are feeling
relaxation
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on
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 the whole body and release stress from routine working and personal
life
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, and
benefit
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benefits
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 our mental health.
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,
people
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 in a happy mood may easily
to
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apply
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deal with problems because they try to think
more
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of more
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positive
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a positive
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, creative
way
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ways
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 to get things done. Some
researches
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researchers
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 point out that
people
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 live even longer when they felt content or excited on a typical day. It allows
people
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 to have a stronger immune system and fewer sleep problems which are
favorable
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live
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living
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 longer. In conclusion, there are good effects in gaining happiness in
people
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’s
life
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,
although
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 it is hard to measure joyfulness
on
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individual
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the individual
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,
people
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 believe it is critical in our
life
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.
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