In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problem as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Nowadays, more and more
people
around the world eating too much fast
food
and
as a
result
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leading to many
health
problems
.
However
, I do not agree that the
government
should add more
tax
on
such
food
. There are several reasons why the
government
should not increase
a
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the
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tax
on fast
food
.
First,
people
had a right to choose what they like to eat and they should be responsible for their own
health
,
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and should acknowledge what is the adverse effect of overeating fast
food
.
Second,
the price of fast
food
is relatively cheap than healthy
food
, the manufacturers will set a higher price and pass on the increase in costs to the customers if the
government
impose more
tax
on it, and it is not fair to those lower income group of
people
, limiting their choices of
food
. I believe that eating too much fast
food
is not the only reason
of
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for
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resulting
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the resulting
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health
problems
.
People
with bad living habits
such
as smoking and too much alcohol in their daily life will
also
have a greater chance
leading
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of leading
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to
health
problems
.
Besides
, citizens should have a
balance
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balanced
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diet and do more regular exercises to get away from
health
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a health
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problem.
For example
,
people
should have more vegetables and fruits in
everyday
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their everyday
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diet and have
a
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apply
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control
of
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over
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eating too much fast
food
.
Furthermore
, the
government
should do more promotions on healthy
food
especially
introduce
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introducing
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vegetarian
food
which is good for
health
and organize some
health
seminars teaching
people
what is the disadvantages of too much fast
food
. In conclusion, the
government
impose
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imposing
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a higher
tax
on fast
food
is not the only solution to prevent
people
suffering
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from suffering
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from
health
problems
, and
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a balance
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balance
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balanced
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diet and take exercise are the keys to
get
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getting
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away from it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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