Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and techology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.

There are many subjects in university that people can choose,
however
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some of them argued which subjects are better for their
future
. Science and technology are the most known
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powerful subjects than the other. But, not all students can be enjoyed
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those
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learning
process
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, they prefer to
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the
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class that they want.
This
wiritng
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writing
will be given both views and authors' opinions. On the one hand, is it true that all studies related to science and IT are useful for the
future
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Because
of
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those studies are following present
situation
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unlike
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history or literature which studied
about
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the past.
However
, parents should measure their
childrens'
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learning capability and
theirs'
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passion.
Furthermore
, it is okay for
child
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to take
this
course as long as he or she is feeling passionate.
On the other hand
, most
of
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universities
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students have an age range between 17 to 20 which a golden age for gain new knowledge and
experiment
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.
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chance should not be missed by the youth, so their parents and teachers should let them
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enroll
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the class that they want. Personally,
i
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agree with
this
statment
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statement
.
In addition
, there are a lot of cases where adult take their career
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totally different from their educational background. In my view, it is fine if someone
want
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to study a subject that he or she wants. For those people who take science and
technology related
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major
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, it will be good for them because it can lead them to be an expert in the
future
.
However
,
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students
in
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the opposite, they can take extra courses if they want to switch
career
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.
Hence
, nowadays there are a lot of platforms or organisations that will provide fresh
graduate
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graduates
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to develop
their
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skills that
needed
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for the
future
.
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