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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of diverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages. In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of diverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages.

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Technology
 advancement in the automobile industry revolutionized the ways of commuting from one destination to another.
However
, in the near future, there is a possibility that
car
 manufacturers will launch new automobiles which operate on their own without the need for a driver. The commute will be done only with the passenger.
However
, I believe that automation brings some crucial drawbacks rather than benefits. First of all, there are some advantages of driverless cars, like automated vehicles saving the time of
travelers
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while
 commuting towards their destination from driving and they spend their time doing other work during sitting in the
car
.
Whereas
 the chances of disobeying and breaking traffic laws and regulations decrease or even eliminate.
Moreover
, older
people
 and special
people
 gain a huge amount of benefits because they
do
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 not
require
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 to depend on the support of other
people
 and they easily travel anywhere
where
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they want to travel.
On the other hand
, the industry will use new digital
technology
 and artificial intelligence in automobiles which is risky and increases the chances of errors and malfunctions that
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 the passenger’s life in danger.
Also
,
this
technology
 is connected to its central core hub, and if any glitch or error comes in the software of the
car
 or connective issue arises in that scenario chance of a road accident increases.
Furthermore
, driverless
car
technology
also
 impacts the jobs of millions of
people
 all around the world which results in a surge in unemployment. In conclusion, the drawback of adopting
this
technology
 is more than its fines. Meanwhile,
people
 are anxious and concerned about the safety of
this
technology
.
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