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Some expert believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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There is a belief that
children
 learning a foreign
language
 in primary
school
 will communicate more fluently than start when they are in secondary
school
 because of their brain development and other theories.
Firstly
, learning at the age of brain development helps
children
 to learn faster when compared to secondary
school
 students. The younger ones tend to have more potential to get the overloading information in a shorter
time
.
Secondly
, the sooner
children
 begin to learn the
language
, the sooner they get used to it. It is the way of communication, if the
children
 have more way of communication rather than their own first
language
, they have more opportunities for experiences.
Thirdly
, in the secondary institute, there is plenty of stuff to be learned, and students may have less
time
 of studying outside of their classes.
On the other hand
, forcing
children
 to learn a foreign
language
 may lessen their
time
 for developmental activities. The
children
 in a primary
school
 should do the activities which help them develop their social skills. They may lose a chance of being childhood
such
 as playing with friends, family
time
, and playing games. In conclusion, I strongly think the advantages of learning a foreign
language
 sooner outweigh the disadvantages. Now, the world is now connected, which is globalization, it looks like
language
 is compulsory for new generations, not only a second
language
 is required, but
also
 a third or more. Concerning how difficult of learning another
language
, beginning
practising
Change the verb form
to practise
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 when younger should be better than when they have limited hours.
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