The diagram shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane
The diagram illustrates the
sugar
-producing procedure in 7 steps, from Use synonyms
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canes to Use synonyms
sugar
.
The total production involves 7 steps and the four main key actions are farming, crushing, evaporating and drying.
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First,
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cane needed one to one and half years to grow before they are harvested. There are two different ways to collect Use synonyms
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cane on a farm, one is cut by a farmer with a knife, and the other is collected by a professional machine. Use synonyms
Next,
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canes in a crushing machine, the Use synonyms
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canes become Use synonyms
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juice
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, a limestone filter extracts the Linking Words
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, to make it purified.
In the fifth producing section, the purified Use synonyms
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, it is the step of the evaporator. After the purifying Linking Words
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turns into syrup, the Use synonyms
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syrup has to be centrifuged, in order to pick up the Use synonyms
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crystals. Use synonyms
Finally
, the crystals-separated syrup is put in a container with holes, for cooling and drying it.Linking Words
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