Many parts of the world are losing important natural resources such as forests, animals, and clean water. Choose one resource that is disappearing and explain why it needs to be saved. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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We know industrial in the world development more and more .

Humans

are using natural

resources

extremly

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extremely

wastefully . Peoples use natural

resources

indiscriminately for

industrilization

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industrialisation

brings a repercussion for the natural

resources

. For

year

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the world are losing important losing natural

resources

but

forest

natural

resources

are decreasing important .

There fore

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,we

need

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save

forest

resources

before the

forest

might

dissapear

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disappear

. We

need

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toneed

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save

forest

resources

because

forest

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forests

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play

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important

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an important

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role in

humans

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life .The first

forest

is the lung green of

earth

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the earth

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. It provides oxygen for

humans

and all animals living on

earth

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humans

want to get more

factory

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factories

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and make

produce

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products

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from trees,

humans

destruct the

forest

and

animal

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animals

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lose their

home

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homes

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.The

sencond

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second

forest

protect

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protects

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the durability and natural development of the soil ,

forest

can avoid natural disasters

such

as erosion,tsunami and many

disaster

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disasters

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. In

viet

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nam

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there have been many

landslide

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that

have

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killed a lot of people. So we

need

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toneed

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save

forest

sources.

Forest

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is decreasing more and more so we need

resistant

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to change. We must have

solution

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a solution

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to save

forest

sources . People should eradicate cutting down

forest

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forests

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and plant a lot of

tree

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trees

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. People

not

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do not

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use

forest

resources

indiscriminately for

industrilization

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industrialisation

.Building protected areas and national parks to protect

forest

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forests

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Forest

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have many

role

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for

humans

and we must totally stop

activitie

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activities

activity

repercussion

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repercussions

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the forest

a forest

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forest

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forests

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Forest

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need

protect

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protection

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because

protect

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protecting

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forest

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forests

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is protecting the world from dangerous

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
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43Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

5.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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You have a full time job and also doing a part time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to the course tuttor. In your letter Describe the situation Explain why you cannot continue at this time Say what action you would like to take

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