Social media helps people to keep in touch with friends and stay on top of news and events. Do you think the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

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to stay connected with each other and be aware of the most recent news. I personally opine that
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sides of
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are more than
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the downsides
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.
To begin
with the benefit of
this
virtual environment, it is proven that it has been extremely beneficial for businesses
such
as online shops, and hair salons. To illustrate,
while
scrolling down on
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section of Instagram, people can see numerous Pages offering their services with samples or products to sell, bridal make-up or clothes shops
for instance
, and make it quite easy and comfortable for customers to contact them and make a contract or purchase something.
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,
this
way they can expand their jobs more effectively compared to traditional advertising systems.
On the other hand
, social media addiction and inappropriate
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or the things we must consider
while
surfing
net
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. The results of recent research
shows
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that 75% of students would rather
having
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video calls or
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upload
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pictures on
facebook
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Facebook
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instead
of doing homework and 35% of adults claimed that they had difficulties spending time with their family
due to
being attached to their phones.
Moreover
, it is available for all age ranges and even kids can easily access it which can be hazardous since there is not enough supervision applied
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the
contents
shared there.
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Sexual
and violent
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or only some examples of bad things waiting for young people there.
To conclude
, social media can be effective when it comes to advertising your job,
although
, it can be a huge
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wast
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of time and leads to addiction
as well as
being
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the potential
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for sharing
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which are not suitable especially for kids
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • instantaneous communication
  • geographical barriers
  • information hub
  • breaking news
  • educational content
  • professional networking
  • industry experts
  • community support
  • privacy infringement
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • mental wellbeing
  • social comparison
  • online validation
  • cyberbullying
  • detriments
  • vulnerable individuals
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