The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph shows information about females' and males' inability to read or write in several regions of the world in the past year.
Overall
, it can be seen that women occupy the highest figure in all presented categories in the bar chart axis ,
However
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it is noticed some differences between them. It is noticeable that the rate of women illiteracy in areas
such
as Sub-Saharan, Arab States and South Asia has the highest percentage, being nearly or overcoming 50 per cent, respectively. It can
also
be pointed out that in developed countries there is only a slight difference between males' and females' inability to read or write and the values are practically inexistent.
In addition
to
this
, it is in
this
category that females have the lowest value. It is
also
worth noticing that, South Asia reveals the highest point in men illiteracy and developed countries the lowest. In summary, women are the ones who contribute the most to world illiteracy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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