Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Sometimes

people

argued that at

this

time, influencers and celebrities are being recognized because of their beauty and

also

luxurious affluent lifestyle,

moreover

,

this

condition will influence young

people

in

wrong

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direction.

Personally

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I

agree

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onagree

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this

argument,

however

, there is

also

famous

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the famous

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person who accomplished their popularity by doing hard work and endurance. In

this

essay, I will explain

further

. On the one hand, It is true that many

people

achieve fame without effort and diligence.

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, it can be being born from

famous

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a famous

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rich family, married

with

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billionaire

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a billionaire

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or popular person and appeared some TV shows. A good example would be

Kardashian

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family, which none of the

member

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of

this

family have any talent

and

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history of hardworking, after participating

reality

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TV series, they became well known.

Furthermore

, they are normalizing cosmetic surgeries,

such

as breast, butt and lip augmentation, chin removal and lip unstable relationships to teenagers.

As a result

,

lot

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of

people

are becoming

victim

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victims

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of plastic surgeries and money.

On the other hand

, there are some celebrities

which

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who

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obtain their

honor

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honour

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from many

attempt

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attempts

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and sleepless days. Actors, singers, artists and

sport

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players are popular because of their endurance and dedicated actions,

as a result

, they make themself as

a

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excellent role

model

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in

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youngsters. To be exact, Jackie Chan is

great

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actor and Oscar winner who truly did amazing jobs

through

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many years, what is more, in the

beginning

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he even does not know English.

To conclude

, it is best that young adults choose their

exampler

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example

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based on their way of achieving popularity. From my point of view,

since

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there

is

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people

who easily obtained their

honor

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honour

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while

others are

tried

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hard.