Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Sometimes
people
argued that at this
time, influencers and celebrities are being recognized because of their beauty and also
luxurious affluent lifestyle, moreover
, this
condition will influence young people
in wrong
direction. Change the article
the wrong
Personally
I Add a comma
,Personally
agree
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onagree
toagree
withagree
this
argument, however
, there is also
famous
person who accomplished their popularity by doing hard work and endurance. In Add an article
the famous
a famous
this
essay, I will explain further
.
On the one hand, It is true that many people
achieve fame without effort and diligence. For instance
, it can be being born from famous
rich family, married Add an article
a famous
with
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to
billionaire
or popular person and appeared some TV shows. A good example would be Add an article
a billionaire
Kardashian
family, which none of the Correct article usage
the Kardashian
member
of Change to a plural noun
members
this
family have any talent and
history of hardworking, after participating Correct word choice
or
reality
TV series, they became well known. Change preposition
in reality
Furthermore
, they are normalizing cosmetic surgeries, such
as breast, butt and lip augmentation, chin removal and lip unstable relationships to teenagers. As a result
, lot
of Correct article usage
a lot
people
are becoming victim
of plastic surgeries and money.
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victims
On the other hand
, there are some celebrities which
obtain their Correct pronoun usage
who
honor
from many Change the spelling
honour
attempt
and sleepless days. Actors, singers, artists and Fix the agreement mistake
attempts
sport
players are popular because of their endurance and dedicated actions, Change the noun form
sports
as a result
, they make themself as a
excellent role Correct article usage
apply
model
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models
in
youngsters. To be exact, Jackie Chan is Change preposition
for
great
actor and Oscar winner who truly did amazing jobs Add an article
a great
through
many years, what is more, in the Change preposition
over
beginning
he even does not know English.
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To conclude
, it is best that young adults choose their exampler
based on their way of achieving popularity. From my point of view, Correct your spelling
example
examples
since
there Correct word choice
apply
is
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are
people
who easily obtained their honor
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honour
while
others are tried
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trying
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