Some people believe that Art gives our lives meaning and purpose. Others believe that it is merely a distraction from real life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays,
art
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is a part of our
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life
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,
art
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can not be separated from
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because
they
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it
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come
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from
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the human
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mind and
behavior
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, it
also
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represent
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the identity of a region. Especially in Bali,
art
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in
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has a lot of deep meaning
due to
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the tradition here.
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, as
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, in my
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art
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not only has meaning and purpose,
it
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but it
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also
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contains a reflection of its region. The first point of
art
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is how human
being
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beings
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make a clear difference between
human
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humans
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and
animal
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animals
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. Human could spill their mind into
art
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, they talk about their
life
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thru
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through
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art
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,
some
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and some
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of
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the
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artist
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artists
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speak up
by
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about
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their masterpiece. Sometimes,
art
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has a hidden meaning in it and
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the curious things of
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.
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, the meaning of
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art
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has a purpose to help to face or avoid their problems
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an aesthetic way Some
of
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people believe that
art
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is a distraction
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from
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normality.
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, the major use of
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is for lifting
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the human’s
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human’s
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spirit. For
the
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example is a
song
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, whenever you feel tired, when you hear a
song
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thats
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that
that's
bring
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fun to
you
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mood, it
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you to release your
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, commonly the
song
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you
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the most.
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Similarly
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when you feel sad or angry,
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song
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a song
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magically could lift up your soul and avoid your problems for a
while
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.
For
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the
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summarize,
art
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is a thing that
have
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been a part of human history and
identically
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is identically
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to the region. It
purposed
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is purposed
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to help
human
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humans
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speak up and help human to reduce stress and enjoy their
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.
Thus
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, it is my view that the aesthetic and the
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unique
of
art
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more
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is more
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than just an entertainment object,
furthermore
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it helps human
being
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beings
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out of struggling
life
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.
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Consider varied sentence structures to enhance readability and engagement.
Accuracy
Review the use of articles ('a', 'the') and prepositions ('in', 'of') for accuracy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aesthetic
  • cathartic
  • cultural tapestry
  • expressionism
  • fleeting
  • introspection
  • monetary value
  • nostalgia
  • profound impact
  • socioeconomic
  • subjective perspective
  • visceral response
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