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Space travel has been possible for some time and some people believe that space tourism could be developed in the future. Do you think it is a positive or negative development.

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Following the development of modern techniques, people tend to discover more about the nature and universe.
Space
 exploration would be able to become an important part of the tourism
section
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 in the future
due to
 individual curiosity. From my point of view, I completely agree that it is a needed development. There are many reasons why I believe that
space
 travel is a positive expansion.
Firstly
, technical sciences enhance sharply day by day. That will bring the people to the
space
 not only easier but
also
 safer.
Secondly
,
space
 discovery is becoming a part of the main industries in extremely developed nations. These countries have more budget to invest in the new section. They would like to be one of the first countries to evolve on
this
 factor. In other words, they want to be a leader in
this
 field. So, they tried to send their experts to
space
first,
space
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 tourism
will
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 be enhanced
then
.
Finally
, there are many extreme climate change events which happened without any foresees in the past few years.
In addition
, the population in the world is rising gradually every day with no more
space
 expansion.
As a result
, the community tend to explore more about the other universe to find out somewhere to live in the future
instead
 of the Earth.
Space
 tourism is followed by that purpose to become more popular. In conclusion,
space
 travel will be an essential development in the future. I do believe
that is
 a positive trend to contribute to human accomplishments.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Advancement in technology
  • Scientific knowledge
  • Economic benefits
  • Environmental impact
  • Inequality
  • Regulation
  • Sustainable practices
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