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Fast food is becoming one part of life everywhere; this has bad effects on our lifestyles and diet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The dietary habits of people all around the world have changed a lot ,as fast
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 became so popular everywhere. It evokes a discussion about its ill
effects
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 on
health
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 and
food
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 habits .
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 essay will discuss it in detail before stating my opinion. To commence with ,
due to
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 the busy schedules of life the majority of people prefer to have instant and cooked foods ,
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 trend makes the fast-
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 industry being a major role in deciding the
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 style. Restaurants and hotels promote fast-
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 culture and gain large profits . To add on , globalization brings a wide variety of fast
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 companies to every corner of the world ,these corporates advertise their products through social media, television and so on .
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 youngsters in families are getting attracted to
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 flow easily by its mouth-licking taste and colour .
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 , fast foods, which are good in taste and colour , are made with ingredients of poor nutritional value. Its continuous over-usage will result In adverse
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 on
health
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 . To be clear , a high intake of junk
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 , which is high in cholesterol and fatty acids makes not only obesity and heart disease but
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 leads to poor immunity .
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, studies done on children , who eat fast
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 , by World
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 Organization were alarmed about its adverse
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 on
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 and decreased life expectancy .
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 , after discussing the views
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 strongly believe that the overuse of fast
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 in daily dietary will leads to severe adverse
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 on
health
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.
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 the instant or junk
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 culture should be avoided by promoting healthy
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 habits and lifestyle.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart diseases
  • nutritional deficiency
  • malnutrition
  • convenience
  • nutritional value
  • busy lifestyles
  • balanced meals
  • economic impact
  • lower-income groups
  • healthier alternatives
  • cultural heritage
  • culinary diversity
  • mass production
  • environmental degradation
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