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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon.A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town.The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon.A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town.The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
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The map below shows the
town
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 of Garlsdon and the new
supermarket
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 planned for the
town
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.Two possible sites for
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supermarket
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supermarkets
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 and
Garlsdon
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the Garlsdon
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 population (65,000)
shown
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are shown
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in
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on
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 the map.
Moreover
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 the symbol of industry,housing, countryside,
town
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 centre,railway and main roads
illustrated
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are illustrated
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 with different lines and colours
in
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on
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 the map.
Overall
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,building the new
supermarket
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 will be so profitable.Because the
supermarket
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is lacated
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lacated
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located
 in
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town
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the town
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 centre and it is
closely
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close
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 to residential houses and each two industry and
also
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railway
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the railway
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 and main roads passes from here. There are three different
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town
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towns
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 away from the Garlsdon.The name of
these three
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this three town
these three towns
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town
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 are Hindon,Bransdon and
Cransdon
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,each 3
city
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cities
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 located differ long way.Hindon
located
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is located
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 12 km away,Bransdon 16 km and
Cransdon
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 25 km.The
town
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 which is belong to
most
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the most
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 population and
located
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is located
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 the most distance is
Cransdon
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(population is 29.000).
Railway
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The railway
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 only passes from two
city
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cities
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(Hindon and
Cransdon
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, supermarket, cransdon with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Congestion
  • Economic benefits
  • Environmental impact
  • Foot traffic
  • Green space
  • Job creation
  • Local property values
  • Parking availability
  • Pollution
  • Proximity
  • Public transportation
  • Sustainability
  • Traffic patterns
  • Residential areas
  • Shopping convenience
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