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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table illustrates information about the fund that would allocate to the
police
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 for two years
while
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 the pie charts portray the percentage of
police
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 expenditure.
Overall
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 it can be seen that
police
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 funding increased over the given year and the largest resource of
police
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 funds came from the National government. The highest expenditure component is for Salaries (officers and staff),
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 the lowest is for the technology sector. Looking at the table in more detail, resource funds from the National Government and other sources (eg grants) increased by only about 0.5 to 2.3
million
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. In 2017, National Government provide 175.5
million
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while
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 the number increased by 2.3
million
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 in the next year and accounted for 177.8
million
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 in 2018.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words police, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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