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Many students Around The World are not choosing science subjects at University, give reason for that and what are impact on the community?

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There are different
science
 subjects at a university all around the world,
however
, many
students
 do not
enroll
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science
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in science
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 majors. These individuals may believe that
science
 graduates have no chance to
apply
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 high-salary jobs or they have to
contunie
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continue
 their educations
for
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to
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differentiation
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differentiate
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 from their counterparts. These actions have some consequences on
the
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society
such
 as fewer scientists and tutors in
universities
. Nowadays,
students
 do not apply
science
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 programs
due to
 higher-income expectations, and many of them believe extraordinary competition in academies
are
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is
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 extremely hard to get better places in the future. If
science
 graduates want to earn more than 100.000 dollars annually, they have to improve their
competetive
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competitive
 skills. Not only should they provide a great portfolio, but
also
 focus on a
spesific
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specific
 field,
for instance
, more than 10 years. These requirements in the sector are challenging for most individuals. For those who have
a
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high-salary
expectation
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expectations
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 in the academy, there are only
few
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positions
 for their main interests.
Although
 in the Middle East, available university
positions
 are higher,
in contrast
, their payments
relatively
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are relatively
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 lower than big
universities
 in Europe and North America.
Students
 all around the world have some obstacles to handle
for
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in
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 studying
science
 programs.
Therefore
, decreased demand
on
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for
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science
 majors affects
the
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society and its proportion of tutors and scientists in
universities
. These job
positions
' figures will
decreased
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decrease
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 over time,
in addition
, they will not have
chance
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a chance
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 to lead their experiences to
next
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the next
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 generations. In conclusion, a group of
students
 all around the world are not placing
science
 lectures at
universities
due to
 high-income concerns and the burden of academic
competitions
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competition
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. The action of these
students
 will result in
decreased
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a decreased
the decreased
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 number of job
positions
 and
restriction
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restrictions
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 in the experience transmission between generations.
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