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In some countries it is common for school leavers to take a year off between finishing school and starting university. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this practice?

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These days, it is more popular amongst school
graduaters
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graduates
 to take a gap year before entering the university. I totally agree with
this
 trend, because it is better to give some time to yourself for speculating about your future profession. In
this
 essay, I will discuss why. Nowadays, it is the most common situation when people
became
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 dissatisfied with their major which they study at university. The main reason for
that is
 the decision which was made unconsciously. To illustrate, young people leave school at the age of seventeen or eighteen and it is obligatory for them to make quick decisions about their future profession at
such
young
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 age. Mostly it comes out
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 and regret for losing time.
Thus
, I am convinced that they have to take some time
for brainstorming
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 about their future plans and come to an agreement consciously.
Further
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 it is always the best choice to upgrade your skills, define weaknesses and work on them or enrich your knowledge with relevant pieces of information  before starting the university. So, when one becomes a student, one will be aware of most of the topics which will be taught in class.
Moreover
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possible obstacles later.
Nonetheless
, from the aforementioned
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 I truly believe that youngsters do not have to rush themselves
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such
 kind of important choices in their
life
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.
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