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Behaviors in schools is getting worse. Explain the causes of this problem and suggest some possible solutions.

#behaviors #schools
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Nowadays
due to
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 recent studies, there are some facts about the worst manner of pupils in academic environments over the world
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 schools. There seem to be some main justifications stemming from
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 situation, and
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 some steps that are going to address two of the main causes and remedies fully. On the one hand, the Possible main causes of bad behaviours in schools are lack of discipline and spoiled children from unstable family backgrounds. Primarily, the lack of structure in these places with many students in some large classes made them difficult to manage.
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, many disruptive or spoiled students are coming from bad family backgrounds which they used to obtain whatever they want by bad behaviour. From another angle, turning to possible solutions setting clear conductions and supporting these rules by families are the best options.
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, principals in these educational environments need to set a clear ethical or behavioural code for pupils to obey. More importantly, teachers have to have great power over disruptive students from their families
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 their support to punish them appropriately
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 school rules and parents should take responsibility.
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, From my perspective, there are several rationales for behaving badly in schools but the absence of a certain set of instructions and lenient parents who spoiled their children are the major causes.
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, the long-lasting remedies for
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 serious challenge these days are clear codes of conduct and taking responsibility for parents and supporting the laws
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