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Tourism is encouraged in many countries. Does tourism bring more advantages or disadvantages to a country?

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Tourism
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The tourism
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industry
 is considered
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the backbones
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backbones
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 of
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the economic
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economic
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is
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in
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 some countries. In my
perspective
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 the merits of
tourism
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the tourism
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industry
are outweighed
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 the demerits. On the one hand, there are
serveral
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several
 downsides of
tourism
 for the
host
country
.
Firstly
, tourists can have a negative
impacts
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impact
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 on the environment.
This
 is because some
toursit
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tourists
treval
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travel
 using vehicles or air
plane
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planes
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 rather than
use
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using
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 eco-friendly way of transport
such
 as
,
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 buses, trains,
subways
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.
Therefore
,
this
 behaviour will
contributes
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 to increases Co2 emissions
as well as
 climate change and global warming.
Furthermore
, some
trourists
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tourists
 adopt unacceptable behaviour namely,
discard
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 the rubbish in oceans or lakes, which
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this
 can contribute to water pollution.
On the other hand
, I would like to argue that the advantages of
tourism
is
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outweigh
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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. The first benefit, the
tourime
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tourism
industry
play
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 a significant role to boosts the economy of the
host
country
.To put
in
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it in
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 other words,
the
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tourists spend a considerable amount of money
in
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on
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 hotels , food,
goods
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and goods
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, which can
leads
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lead
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 to
prosper
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prospering
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 of
economy
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the economy
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host
country
.
Furthermore
,
this
 can encourage the governments to make improvements in infrastructure
such
,
public
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as public
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 transport, airports,
attraction
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and attraction
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 places in order to attract tourists ,which
this
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can
positive
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be positive
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 for individuals and society.
Secondly
,
tourism
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the tourism
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industry
 can create jobs opportunity and income for local people.
For example
 , thousands of jobs can create for people in hotels,shopping
centers
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centres
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, museums. In conclusion, it seems to me that the
tourism
industry
 can create both negative and positive impacts in
host
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the host
a host
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country
,
however
, In my opinion, the pros of
tourism
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the tourism
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industry
 far outweigh the cons.
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