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The age at which people have children has risen. Some people believe that this may cause problems for both these families and the societies they live in. What is your opinion about this?

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In today's
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, having a
child
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 is no longer the primary purpose of a married couple,
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, they plan to buy a house or focus on their business investments.
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 has led to some concerns among the society we live in. In
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 the downsides of gradually increasing the maternal age of having the first
child
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 and the far-reaching consequences of
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 matter. Bringing a
child
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 into
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world
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 comes with a lot of responsibilities and planning. Youth these days have become more career-oriented than ever before which is why they aspire to be financially stable prior to planning a family unlike how it used to be in our grandparent's generation.
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, women in the 1960s had kids as soon as they become 18, which used to be considered late in their times.
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 led to a generation of kids with minimally educated parents which in turn led to the economic instability of some nations. That being said, being pregnant in the late 30s comes with probable health issues for both, the mother and the
child
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. Advanced maternal age is linked to an increased risk of miscarriage, genetic abnormalities, and hormonal imbalances in women.
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, couples who decide to have a baby late have to go through societal pressure as it is still condemned in some parts of the
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. All in all, I am a high-profile proponent of the autonomy of one's body and letting a couple decide when they are ready to bear the responsibilities of a
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all the societal pressure. More educated and financially secure parents will raise kids who have a better sense of the
world
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 and can contribute to society in a positive way.
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