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The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)

The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)
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The line graphs display the
air
pollution
 which was released in the
UK
. The types of
air
pollution
 were divided into transportation, factory business and household between 1990 and 2005.
Overall
, it is clear from the line graphs that total waste
air
 in the
UK
show
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shows
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significant
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a significant
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 reduction during the period state in question. The historical trend in the US, the highest emission came from
factory
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the factory
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 business, reducing about 6
million
tons
 in 1990 to 4
million
tons
 in 1999.
Additionally
, a noticeable fall
of
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in
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air
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the air
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 pollutant industry is observed and expected to continue, reaching 2
million
tons
 in 2005. The waste
air
 by
household
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households
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 a quite same pattern drops over
period
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the period
a period
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 with industry type, starting
1
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at 1
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million
tons
 in 1990.
Then
 it had a gradually continuous reduction
during
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from
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 1996 to 2005.
In
contrast
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air
pollution
was
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apply
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exposed by transportation continuously rose from 1
million
tons
 in 1990 to about 1.5
million
tons
 in 2005. In summary, the total
air
pollution
 from
three
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the three
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categorized
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categories
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 in the
UK
were
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was
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 a remarkable dropping from 7
million
tons
 in 1990 to 4
million
tons
, despite some fluctuation between 1999 and 2005.
Finally
, total
air
pollution
 in the
UK
well
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was well
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control
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controlled
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into
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to
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 lower than 4
million
tons
 in 2005.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollution, uk, million, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduction" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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