you have arranged to visit a friend in England but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • explain the important event • apologise for the situation • suggest a new arrangement

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Dear Amira, Hello, how are you doing, my bestie
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I didn’t really want
this
, but I have to tell you something that might offend you. I wanted to warn you that I can’t go to see you
this
week
in England. I’m so sorry but
this
week
my cousin will have a wedding and he is very close to me, he wants me to be there for his happy,
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day in his life. I wanted to get tickets for the twentieth of February, but I figured that if I flew away, I wouldn’t be at his wedding. I wanted to suggest to you
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if it’s convenient for you. Maybe I should fly next
week
and not
this
week
. I can take a ticket for the second of March. If you don't make any plans for these days. I really regret
this
. I look forward to your reply letter. Say hello to your mom on my behalf. I am kissing you, bye. Best wishes, Rukhi Zikrillaeva.
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Task Achievement
To improve your Task Achievement, make sure to fully address all parts of the prompt in your letter, providing clear explanations and details about the event leading to your change of plans, a sincere apology, and a concrete, detailed suggestion for new arrangements. Elaborate on each of these elements to enhance the completeness of your response.
Coherence and Cohesion
For Coherence and Cohesion, work on organizing your ideas more effectively. Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and purpose, with logically organized sentences that flow smoothly from one to the next. Using a variety of linking words and phrases can also help to connect your ideas more cohesively.
General Writing Advice
To refine your writing style further, aim for a balance between formal and friendly, suitable for a letter to a friend yet mindful of clarity and correctness. Avoid overly casual phrases and strive for correct punctuation and capitalization throughout your letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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