The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live.
The pie chart illustrates the country of born of
people
in Australia
and the table depicts that where people
live in a rural area
or cities
area
depends on the birth
of these countries. Overall
, Australia
is the highest leading country. At the same time, the Netherlands is the least country with the
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birth
of
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people
living, and
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in, and
on the other hand
, the majority of people
preferred to live in cities
area
than in rural areas
.
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with, Correct article usage
the Netherland
Netherland
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Netherlands
people
's birth
in
which 90% of Change preposition
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people
resides in Cities
and only 10% lived
in rural Wrong verb form
live
areas
. while
, China which is accounted for 2% of the birth
people
in that 99% of the people
liked to live in an urban area
, and just 1% lived
in rural Wrong verb form
live
areas
.
In New Zealand, 80% of people
live in urban areas
, which is the lowest compared to other countries, while
20% of people
live in village areas
, the highest number of people
living with respect to other countries. In Australia
, 73% of births
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birth
of
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people
living in Australia
in which 83% live in Cities
while
17% live in rural areas
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