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Speaking in a foreign language in a region where you live can cause serious social and practical problems. This essay will discuss why do foreign dialect cannot be useful and why it can raise significant problems.

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Speaking
foreign
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a foreign
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language
 in
foreign
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a foreign
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 country is thought to be hard for
people
, which can cause serious social and practical
problems
. I am affirmative with
this
 statement, though some
people
 might not have any serious
problems
 when they speak foreign languages. Speaking a foreign
language
 means the
person
 is not familiar with the
language
, especially when
oneself
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he
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 is not fluent. Fluency is one of the main
problems
 of speaking another
language
, which can cause several
problems
 when they are speaking with native speakers or nearby locals. The
problems
 that can occur are mispronunciation and accidentally saying foul
words
. Mispronunciation can lead to miscommunication between the foreign
person
 and the locals, especially the one with no
experiences
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 in conversing with foreign
people
.
Similarly
, accidentally saying foul
words
also
 can lead to misunderstanding.
This
 problem often happens when a foreign
person
 is trying to say some popular
words
 or slang despite not knowing the meaning. They can be seen as rude, ignorant, or even a racist.
Then
, a social penalty will be given
upon
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 the foreign
person
,
although
 they did not know what was wrong.
However
, these
problems
 can be prevented with proper education for foreign
people
, which is given by a native speaker. Nowadays,
people
 can educate others on social media platforms, where
language
 mistakes often occur between two or more groups.
To conclude
, speaking
foreign
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a foreign
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language
 can be educational,
although
people
 have to consider their pronunciation and pick
words
 carefully. Local and native communities should be ought to help those who are in need of guidance in speaking other languages and kindly remind the foreigners when they
made
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 a mistake.
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task response
The essay provides a clear response to the prompt, discussing the challenges of speaking a foreign language and suggesting solutions for improving communication. The main points are well-developed and relevant to the topic.
coherence and cohesion
The essay demonstrates good coherence and cohesion through the use of clear topic sentences, transitions, and relevant supporting details. However, there could be a stronger link between the introduction and conclusion to tie the essay together more effectively.
task response
Clear explanation of the challenges of speaking a foreign language
task response
Effective use of examples to support the main points
coherence and cohesion
Consistent organization and flow of ideas

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