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Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is a growing argument on the packaging of
goods
 from
manufacturers
 and
supermarkets
. Some believe it should be reduced by the providers.
While
 others believe customers are responsible to avoid getting
goods
 with a
lot
 of packaging. For the first
view
, some people agree that
manufacturers
 and
supermarkets
 should reduce the packaging.
First
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 point, as a provider you seek to satisfy customers.
Hence
, the demand of the public
,
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is to lessen the amount of packaging. Another point, less packaging leads to a better environment. Extra materials can no longer be used and are hard to degrade in the environment.
In addition
, not all materials are recycled.
While
 the other
view
 agrees it is the customer’s choice not to buy
goods
 with a
lot
 of packaging. Sometimes a nice pretty design requires a
lot
 of packaging,
for example
, gifts are meant to have unique colourful packaging.
Also
, some types of
goods
 require certain features with the packaging,
such
 as the packaging of a dessert that comes with a spoon and plate for heating. In my opinion,
manufacturers
 and
supermarkets
 should consider the thoughts of the public and hear their feedback.
Also
, consider the environment and how the materials produced affect it.
Additionally
, the customer can avoid certain types of
goods
 and choose something more suitable for him.
To sum up
, both views bring some valid points. The first
view
 is giving responsibility to
manufacturers
 and
supermarkets
 for the choice of reducing packaging.
While
 the second
view
 thinks that the customer should avoid buying
goods
 with a
lot
 of packaging.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Eco-friendly
  • Carbon footprint
  • Excessive packaging
  • Biodegradable materials
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Consumer advocacy
  • Environmental stewardship
  • Waste reduction
  • Recycling initiatives
  • Green practices
  • Minimalist lifestyle
  • Resource conservation
  • Sustainable consumption
  • Packaging alternatives
  • Regulatory measures
  • Ethical choices
  • Environmental impact assessment
  • Renewable resources
  • Compostable packaging
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