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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they want. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #professionals #doctors #engineers #work #country
There are two different types of view, which is that the skilled jobs workers should
work
 in the
countries
 where they studied and qualified,
while
 it depends on their choice
what
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 they want. First of all, there are some points of view why they should
work
 in the
pacific
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of
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countries
 without their choices. The significant reason is, if the skilled
people
 who are working in
medical
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the medical
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 and IT industry,
in particular
, leave their
countries
 only
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about
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their
comfort
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 lives and better salary, the lack of employees situation will
be occurred
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.
On the other hand
, if
the
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technologists are free to be employed by other
countries
, they will be more passionate and ambitious about their
career
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careers
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.
For example
, one of the
doctor
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doctors
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 would like to
work
 in a poor country which is in Africa, the choice will bring great
beneficial
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 not only for him or her but
also
the
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 country’s
people
 can have a
improvement
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 quality of
lives
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life
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. Another
examples
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,
in
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is in
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hospitality
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the hospitality
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 industry in Australia, many
people
 who are a chef from all over the world keep trying to immigrate to
work
 in
better
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a better
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work
environment
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environments
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 with
good
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a good
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 income for their lives. Based on the research from
Australia
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Australian
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 immigration,
the
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foreigner
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foreign
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 workers have covered
in
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the various skilled industry
such
 as
medical
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medicine
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, hospitality and IT significant,
that
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 citizens
does
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do
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 not prefer for hardworking. In conclusion, I believe that
the
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people
 who are in the
skill required
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skill-required
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 occupation should be free to
work
 in different
country
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countries
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 for both
countries
 and themselves.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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