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In the past, most people worked for small businesses, while more people now work for large businesses. What are the advantages and disadvantages of working for large businesses?

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In earlier times, a
lot
 of
people
 worked in small
companies
, but nowadays, big
companies
 have a
lot
 of
workers
. There are a number of benefits and drawbacks of
this
 development. On the one hand, working
most
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people
 in small
businesses
 in past ,
while
 most
people
 are working in big
businesses
 may deliver several obvious demerits. In big
companies
, the number of employees is too much. Because of
this
, salary may be given less than small
companies
. Because
,
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 it is difficult to allocate
to
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too
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 many
workers
 and
this
 causes other big problems.
Furthermore
, if
companies
 have a
lot
 of
workers
 and products are made a
lot
, their quality may decrease. Because of a
lot
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workers
, it is very hard to check every worker.
Also
, it has other problems related to product quality and all kinds of budget-damaging downsides.
On the other hand
, the quantity of
people
 who work in large
companies
 is advantageous
due to
 a number of reasons.
For instance
, big
companies
 may have more jobs and you can find work easily that you want.
In addition
,
product
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the product
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 of big
companies
 may expert to other foreign countries and it makes a
lot
 of opportunities for employees.
For example
,
companies
 can send their
workers
 to foreign countries for training, give tickets for various trips and provide other opportunities. In short,
this
 is a good idea that
people
 work in large
businesses
. In conclusion, working in large
companies
 is better than working in small
businesses
 for
people
. In
generally
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, there are advantages and disadvantages in
this
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