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Some say that
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advertising
have great manipulation for
people
to persuade them to buy
thing
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which they do not need,
while
other think that
people
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advertising anymore. Even though
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teenagers
siting
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in the
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/
twiter
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twitter
/
facebook
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seeing every time advert and
not
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more
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in them,
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adults
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could be
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it
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this
. On the one hand, most
of
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they
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phone
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whole
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day and facing with
problem
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problems
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like
ad
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. Because now most of
ads
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can lie about their product.
For instance
,
while
youth
generstion
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playing games from nowhere can appear
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and most
of
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teenagers
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can
beleive
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believe
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out that it was not as good as in the advertisement.
In addition
, whilst watching
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the movie
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it can come into view some advertisement to download some specific app and
this
thing interrupt
people
from watching their movie.
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, I
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that advertising can help most
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people
with their
problem
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problems
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.
On the other hand
,
people
, most
of
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adult
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adults
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taking advantage
from
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of
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advertizing
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advertising
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.
In particular
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shiping
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shipping
.
For example
, now it went viral
buying
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for buying
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things from the internet and selling
it
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them
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with a profit.
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, nearly all
people
who
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money from the internet
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that
ad
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have so many benefits which will help
people
with
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issue
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. I believe that
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have
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more pros than cons. In conclusion,
although
some
adverisement
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advertisement
advertisements
can lie about
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prouct
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product
, it does not mean that advertising
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reliable at all.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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