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Today foods travel thousands of miles from the farm to the consumers. Why is this? Is it a positive or negative trend?

Today foods travel thousands of miles from the farm to the consumers. Why is this? Is it a positive or negative trend?
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There is no doubt these days, many different
kind
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 of food coming from other
countries
 around the world. The question is, Why
this
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 phenomenon started to be
trend
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? In
this
 essay, I am going to describe the positive and negative things
on
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this
 trend. In terms of advantages, most of the foods are not available. The main reason given to support
this
 claim is that the weather, or the atmosphere most of the
gulf
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countries
 import fruit because of the high temperature and the terrible weather. To illustrate in Saudi the temperature
between
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 45 and 50
degree
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, so they can’t tree
an
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apples or
an
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oranges. In
the
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other words, most of the
countries
 import fruits and vegetables because they can’t tree them.
In contrast
,
foods
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food
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 transport
consume
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consumes
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 much
patrol
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petrol
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 and
effects
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affects
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on
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the environment with the Carbone.
Next
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 the companies spend a lot of effort to
check
 the products because food
need
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 a manual
check
 to be healthy and safe for human use. For interest, The KSA have 91
process
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 to
check
fruit
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the fruit
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.
Moreover
, every country
have
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 a different procedure like the UAE have 120 steps for checking
the
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diary products. In
the
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other words, the government have to
check
 everything
go
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goes
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 inside the country for human
safe
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. In conclusion,
imports
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importing
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 foods lead to be the best way to receive
fruits
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fruit
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, but we have to be careful about what we inter
to
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in
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 our
countries
.
although
 I believe that we have to reduce
this
 phenomenon.
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