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Today foods travel thousands of miles from the farm to the consumers. Why is this? Is it a positive or negative trend?

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There is no doubt these days, many different kinds of food come from other
countries
 around the world. The question is, Why has
this
 phenomenon started to be a trend? In
this
 essay, I am going to describe the positive and negative things of
this
 trend. In terms of advantages, most of the foods are not available. The main reason given to support
this
 claim is that the weather, or the atmosphere most of the Gulf
countries
 import fruit because of the high temperature and the terrible weather. To illustrate in Saudi the temperature is between 45 and 50 degrees, so they can’t tree apples or oranges. In other words, most of the
countries
 import fruits and vegetables because they can’t tree them.
In contrast
, food transport consumes a lot of petrol and affects the environment with the Carbone. ,
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Next the companies spend a lot of effort to
check
 the products because food needs a manual
check
 to be healthy and safe for human use. For interest, The KSA have 91 processes to
check
 the fruit.
Moreover
, every country has a different procedure like the UAE have 120 steps for checking diary products. In other words, the government have to
check
 everything goes inside the country for human safety. In conclusion, importing foods lead to be the best way to receive fruit, but we have to be careful about what we
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 our
countries
.
although
 I believe that we have to reduce
this
 phenomenon.
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