IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6.5

With the rise in popularity of the internet, newspapers will soon become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#rise #popularity #internet #newspapers
Technology is increasing tremendously every single
day
. The
Internet
 has offered a vast variety of benefits and some
people
 think that it will take over newspapers in upcoming future. Will everybody be able to access the
internet
 with
such
 ease? I partially agree
to
Change preposition
with
show examples
 the statement and will explain both sides in upcoming paragraphs. It is an undeniable fact that technology has major benefits to individuals, easy to use and very convenient is one of them. It offers
Change the article
the
show examples
easiest way to access any information posted online
whereas
, it is hard to find particular
news
 in a newspaper and
people
 have to wait until the next
day
 to hold their hand on a fresh bunch of
news
.
Moreover
,
people
 can find international
news
 on the
internet
,
on the other hand
, newspapers generally focus on local
news
 of a particular area.
For instance
, checking the weather of foreign countries is quite easy on
Internet
Add an article
the Internet
show examples
 and completely impossible with a newspaper, as it usually delivers
news
 about the local climate. On
contrary
Correct article usage
the contrary
show examples
, everyone in our society is not aware of the
internet
. Elderly
people
,
for example
, do not know how to use the
internet
 and are in the habit of reading papers every
day
. For
such
people
, the importance of the
internet
 is zero and they rely on traditional methods of delivering
news
.
Moreover
, sometimes
due to
 bad connections or any other issues,
people
 are unable to access the
internet
, at that time newspapers hold their backs on daily
news
.
To conclude
, there are countless benefits of using the
internet
, resulting in increasing popularity of the
internet
day
 by
day
 but some masses are not as aware of the technology and rely on paper-based
news
.
Submitted by pjashan7481 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: