some people think it is better to rent an accommodation than own it. while others disagree saying that owning a property has many advantages. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some think that rental accommodation has more benefits,
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others, including me, believe that having your own place has more cons.
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renting accommodation in order to not pay more for the
house
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at the start is fine, after a
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people
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have to have their own property to provide for their family. On the one hand, most
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people
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rent
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houses when they have some trouble with money and they cannot provide their own place to live. Because most of the
people
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at the start are poor. If not include rich parents who provide for their children, it is a common thing in
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world.
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, especially teenagers who are enrolled on the university have to work and
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they working they have to pay for the
rent
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, which is more university.
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, I believe that
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this
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teenage ,life
people
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have to have their own place in order to provide for their family in the near future.
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,
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people
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live on their own property they do not have to worry about something.
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, if they do not pay their
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, they will be evicted by the government.
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, gather their furniture for a particular time,
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it is expensive to buy a property, but I am sure that it will be worth it. In conclusion, even though not having your own
house
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as a teenager's time is fine, in adult time it is better to invest money in a
house
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. As far as I am concerned, in order to not be in stress because of the
rent
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issues I believe that living in your own
house
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is much better.
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